Peer Feedback # 1

Question: Number One

This poem announces it's experience with leisure being gone. By now, most know that leisure has vanished and a newer leisure has been awakened by replacing the 'old leisure.' Examples, imagery, and diction help paint a picture describing the differences between the old leisure and the newer one.

The writer opens the poem with, "Leisure is gone-- gone where the spinning-wheels are gone, and the pack-horses, and slow wagons and pedlars who brought bargains to the door on sunny afternoons." By doing so, the writer gives the audience a time period where things used to run differently by the people who lived there. She describes the 'old' leisure as someone who's open minded to different activities though the leisure preferred shorter days on Sundays without the guilt of it ending.

By directly referring to the old leisure as a man, the writer gives her readers a face. Through imagery, you're able to imagine all it's characteristics and pretend it's an actual person. Throughout her description, a leader with great qualities is painted and presented before us. Her references help her view points by using her knowledge to convey a difference between the two leisure's, one old and one new.

As she reflects on the poem's internal structure, her diction streams out. Strong syntax and view points help the plot and protect her opinion. She presents examples of the 'old' leisure's ways with meaningful descriptions to avoid confusion. Phrases like, "not ashamed," put her thoughts onto paper and reflected a time of dedication to description and writing.

In conclusion, the writer landed all the internal topics that had been brought up. She was straight-forward with her opinions and examples which helped out. She structured a detailed poem and by contrasting the old and newer leisure's, her work showed us the differences in the two. Through examples, imagery and diction, her audience got a better understanding of the poem.